剑桥雅思13小作文9分范文赏读之test4 体育馆对比
剑桥雅思13小作文9分范文赏读之test4 体育馆对比
The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
剑桥雅思小作文解析
关键在于把图中变化较大和变化没那么大的部分区分开。
变化小的部分：
这实际上也是 sports center 的核心部分，其中只有 gym 变成了大约2倍，其他部分没有变化。
不会表达的信息：这块区域，叫做 the sports centre building 或者 the main building
此外，这个区域的 changing room 和 seatings，共同叫做 swimming facilities
如果觉得文章字数过多，可以只写 swimming facilities
容易忽视的信息
gym 沿着 sports center 的北边，stretch along the north side，gym 扩张的方向是向东
2变化大的部分
按照编号的顺序
1. 西侧的 outdoor courts 变成了 lersure pool
2. 东侧的 outdoor courts 变成了 sports hall 和 dance studios
3. 前门的区域(包含 reception)，新增了 sports shop 和 cafe
以下范文，不是按照传统的“一幅图分一组”的方式写的，而是按照“变化大和变化小的区域各分一组”写的。
剑桥雅思小作文范文：
The upper map shows the plan of a university sports centre as it is now and the lower map shows the same building once it has been redeveloped.
主体段1：变化的总体介绍
Overall, the existing 25-metre pool and surrounding facilities will remain largely unchanged. However, the building will be substantially expanded by means of the addition of a leisure pool and a range of other new facilities.
主体段2：中间区域
Currently, the sports centre building consists only of a 25m pool, related swimming facilities and a gym that stretches along the north side. While the planned new sports centre will occupy around twice the current floorspace, these facilities will remain unchanged except that the gym will be significantly extended to the east.
主体段3：周围区域
Either side of the building at present, there are outdoor courts which will make way for a new leisure pool to the west of the main building, and a sports hall and two dance studios to the east. To the south of the 25m pool, the current reception area will be enlarged to accommodate a sports shop and café, on the west and east sides respectively. Finally, new changing rooms will be built in the south-west and south-east corners.
词汇解释
floor space
floor space, or floorspace is the area (measured as square feet or square metres) taken up by a building or part of it 占地面积
剑桥雅思13小作文9分范文赏读之test2 租住房屋占
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
剑桥雅思小作文解析
我们都知道，动态柱状图可以看做线图。
1) 租房家庭的比例总体下降，最后小幅上升
2) 住自购房的家庭的比例总体上升，最后小幅下降
似乎这是一个2条线的线图，文章结构：
A. 把信息分成2个主体段，分别写租房和住自购房的家庭对应的两条线
B. 然后，在结尾段写1971年以及之前和之后租房和自购房的比例大小关系
然而，这样想就错了。
不建议这样写，有2个原因
1图形隐含了信息：租房家庭比例+住自购房的家庭比例=100%
数据是否需要全部写?不用。既然加起来是100%，其实每一年写租房(或者住自购房的)家庭的比例即可。那么，在你把租房家庭主体段写完之后，住自购房的家庭主体段已经不需要写了
2虽然1971年之前的5年租房的比住自购房的多，但是差异一样吗?显然不一样，而这个差异大小的区别是必写信息。
正确的分段方式
主体段1：1971年以及之前的共12个比例分成一大组(一个主体段)，要比较(租房比住自购房)多得特别多和多得没那么多
主体段2：1971年之后的8个比例分成另一大组(另一个主体段)，其他同上
结尾段：写租房的总趋势和住自购房的总趋势
推荐这种分段方式，是因为它能更好地展示图形中的 comparisons, 其实也算是这个题目的标准写法。
但是，并不是非要用标准的方式才能写作文。
如果不这样分段，这篇小作文能达到7分吗?
能，只要你语言够好。
剑桥雅思小作文范文
开头段
The bar chart illustrates how the proportions of households that lived in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales changed from 1918 to 2011.
主体段1：1971年之前
Before 1971, more households lived in rented accommodation than in owned accommodation. The biggest gap was in 1918, when 77% households rented. The same proportions (68%) of households lived in owned accommodation in 1939 and 1953. In 1961, there were as many as 40% of households in owned accommodation. Finally, the year 1971 witnessed equal proportions of households that lived in both types of accommodation.
主体段2：1971年之后
On the other hand, there were more households that lived in owned accommodation than in rented accommodation after 1971. In 1991 and 2001, households in owned accommodation more than doubled those in rented accommodation. The difference was less prominent in 1981 and 2001, when about 60% of households lived in owned accommodation.
结尾段：租房和住自购房家庭的趋势
It is clear that, while there was an increase in the percentage of households in owned accommodation in these two nations, fewer and fewer households rented.