托福写作范文分享：毕业后是否选择回家

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托福独立写作的考题内容有时候和考生息息相关，比如毕业后是否选择回家?下文小编就为大家分享该话题的一篇范文，希望对同学们的托福独立写作有帮助!

托福写作范文分享：毕业后是否选择回家

After they complete their univerrsity studies, some students preferr to live in their hometowns while others choose to live in different towns or cities. Everybody has his own reasons for his preference. After my graduation, I will go back and live in my home city. I have made this decision because of the following reasons.

Firstly, my home city is a big city that can offer a lot. There are plenty of opportunities for work, many big libraries for studies, several differrent musiums for visit, and numerous cinemas, theaters and centers for entertainment. When I go back there, I will have no difficulty in finding a job suitable for me and I can make use of all the facilities available there.

Secondly, if I go back to my home city, I can look after my parents. I take this into consideration because I am their only child and they are now weak and getting on in age. If I live in the same city with them, I can visit them very often and help them whenever it is necessary. Thirdly, if I live in my home city, I will have a lot of friends, schoolmates and relatives to visit and to turn to for help when I need. Of course, I could get acquainted with many people and make many friends if I were to go to live in a strange place, but that takes time. If I go back to my home city, everybody will be waiting for me and I will be able to settle down comfortably without any trouble and waste of time.

In short, my choise is based on a careful consideration of my home city and my family. I think it is a better or sensible choice; in a certain sense, it is a must.

Neighbors are the people who live near us. In your opinion, what are the qualities of a good neighbor? Use specific details and examples in your answer.

托福写作批改：大学毕业生的去向问题

In many countries, good school and medical facilities are available only in cities. Some people think university graduates who become new teacher and doctors should work in rural areas for a few years. What is your view?

学生原文：

Admittedly, there are big gaps between urban areas and rural areas especially in education and medical treatment. People from rural areas have more difficulties in accessing good universities and hospitals compared with city people. Whether the universities graduates who become doctors and teachers should work in rural areas for some time is highly debatable. My opinion is that this suggestion is practical.

Obviously, there are some benefits to the fresh graduates who work as doctors and teachers in rural areas. For example, they can enhance their physical and mental health by experiencing hard life and circumstance which is totally different from the comfortable life in city. They would become strong and independent if they survival from the tough life in rural area, thereby making them more prepared when they face challenges in future. Secondly, the sense of responsibility to the whole society will be developed by helping with others. They will feel proud by helping with others, which makes the society more civilized. Furthermore, they would be more skilled in teaching and diagnosing comparing with their colleagues in cities as they have more chance to practice.

Not only will the fresh graduates be beneficial from such idea, but also the local residents. They can receive more formal education and better treatment. Theoretically, the disparity between cities and rural areas could be reduced effectively by implementing such idea.

However, every coin has two sides. The side effect of this idea is also outstanding as the fresh graduates may lack of competitiveness due to the rural areas are lack of experienced staff and good facilities to supervise and support them. They may lack of knowledge of advanced facilities and systematic teaching method which make them difficult to readapt the new working environment when they go back to cities after several years. Moreover, some of them may treat their job negatively as they are not willing to go to rural areas.

Therefore, it is not wise to send all the fresh doctors and teachers to rural areas to work for a few years. The freedom of choice should be left to themselves. The government should raise some good policies to encourage those who are willing to help and support rural areas. For instance, providing free training and giving extra allowance to the volunteers would be feasible measures.

小站教育老师批改后：

Admittedly, there are big gaps between urban areas and rural areas especially in education and medical treatment. People from rural areas have more difficulties in accessing good universities and hospitals compared with city people.【背景介绍】Whether the universities graduates who become doctors and teachers should work in rural areas for some time is highly debatable. 【改写题目】My opinion is that this suggestion is practical.【自己的观点】

第一段写的非常好，严格按照背景介绍——改写题目——自己的观点这个层次去写，内容很充实。

Obviously, there are some benefits to the fresh graduates who work as doctors and teachers in rural areas. For example, 【Firstly,与下文的secondly对应，这样结构上会紧凑点】they can enhance their physical and mental health by experiencing hard life and circumstance which is totally different from the comfortable life in city. They would become strong and independent if they survival from the tough life in rural area, thereby making them more prepared when they face challenges in future. Secondly, the sense of responsibility to the whole society will be developed by helping with others. They will feel proud by helping with others, which makes the society more civilized. 【这一点阐述的不到位，具体为什么可以增强他们的责任感你要细讲】Furthermore, (Last but not least)they would be more skilled in teaching and diagnosing comparing with their colleagues in cities as they have more chance to practice.

【此外，可以把选取两点内容分开来，两段详细阐释，比较好,更有说服力。不然这样子结构上可能不够紧凑，而且阐述的都不够到位。】

Not only will the fresh graduates be beneficial from such idea, but also the local residents. (亮点句式)They can receive more formal education and better treatment. Theoretically, the disparity between cities and rural areas could be reduced effectively by implementing such idea.

However, every coin has two sides. The side effect of this idea is also outstanding as the fresh graduates may lack of competitiveness due to the rural areas are lack of experienced staff and good facilities to supervise and support them. 【due to后面接名词，不是句子，the rural areas lack of experienced staff and good facilities to supervise and support them】They may lack of(in) knowledge of advanced facilities and systematic teaching method which make them difficult to readapt the new working environment when they go back to cities after several years. Moreover, some of them may treat their job negatively as they are not willing to go to rural areas.

Therefore, it is not wise to send all the fresh doctors and teachers to rural areas to work for a few years. 【这一句总结的很得体到位】The freedom of choice should be left to themselves. The government should raise some good policies to encourage those who are willing to help and support rural areas. For instance, providing free training and giving extra allowance to the volunteers would be feasible measures.

估分：6.5

评价：论证结构还需要再优化，同时让自己的每一个分论点可以得到更充分的阐述。另外一些细节也要注意，写好后读一遍。

【托福写作】托福作文高级句型归纳汇总

句型1

原文材料：

"The new rules should thus expose polluters to a scissor-style pressure:from above,through the central-planning system,and from below,from the media and organisations such as Mr Ma's."

推荐句型：

_x be exposed to a scissor-style pressure: from above, through…, and from below, from….

推荐理由：

压力毫无疑问是一个写作和口语考试中非常常用的一个理由，因为它可以跟很多东西相关，比如压力的来源(生活压力，学习压力，工作压力)，压力的影响(身体差，心情不爽)，减压的方式和措施等等，上面的句型就可以用来描写某一个主体，比如工作的人或者学生，面临着双重压力，工作的人可能来自照顾老人抚养孩子;学生可能来自父母老师以及同伴。

原创例句：

1. A majority of the youths today are exposed to a scissor-style pressure: from above, through looking after the ever growing aging population, and from below, from the soaring costs of raising children.

1.当今，大多数年轻人面临剪刀式的压力：从上方看，通过照顾不断增长的老龄化人口;从下方，从养育子女的高昂成本中受益。

2. A multitude of teenagers at present are exposed to a scissor-style pressure: from above, through their parents with ever-higher expectations, and from below, from their peers most of whom try their best to outdo each other.

2.当前，许多青少年承受着剪刀式的压力：从上方，通过对父母寄予厚望的父母，从下方，从同龄人中，大多数人都尽力超越对方。

学以致用：

1. People care more about public recognition than about money.

根据上面的例句，这个题目我们可以选择不同意，那些苦逼的刚上班没几年的年轻人，怎么可能更在乎名而不是钱呢?他们压力多大啊，当然需要钱了啊;

2. Younger school children should be required to study music and art in addition to language, science, and mathematics.

同样，这个题目我们也可以选择不同意的立场，孩子们本来就压力特别大，父母期望高，同伴都一个比一个牛逼，学校里面的课程和辅导课都上不完呢，怎么可能有时间搞别的呢。这不是坑爹吗?

句型2

原文材料：

While, arguably, this “finding” is as trivial as an umbrella that turns blue when it’s going to rain, there is nothing trivial about collecting personal data, as innocuous as that data may seem.

推荐句型(变体)：

While...seems/sounds as adj. as can be, there is nothing more adj. than...

推荐理由：

我们在独立写作中经常用到对比的写法。这个句型可用在具有对比意味的语境中，前半句当作让步，“尽管对比中的一个因素看起来已经很…”, 后半句转折说“但是另一个因素更…”.

原创例句：

1. While environmental protection seems as pressing as can be, there is nothing more pressing than feeding the growing population in disadvantaged countries where the original eco-system is well preserved.

1.尽管环境保护似乎迫在眉睫，但除了养护原始生态系统良好的处境不利的国家不断增长的人口外，没有什么比这更紧迫了。

2. While a secure job seems as tempting as can be, there is no job more tempting than a risky and well-paid one for the new generation who are mostly avid challenge hunters.

2.虽然一份安全的工作似乎很诱人，但没有什么比充满风险的猎手的新一代冒险和报酬高的工作更诱人了。

3. While playing sports with a couple of friends sounds as relaxing as can be, there is nothing more relaxing than a good book or an old movie for those manual laborers who are wearied out with strenuous physical work every day.

3.在与几个朋友一起运动时，听起来可能会很轻松，但对于那些每天疲惫不堪的体力劳动者来说，没有什么比一本好书或一部老电影更令人放松了。

学以致用：

1. Feeding the world’s growing population is more important than protecting environment.

这道题中如果我们持同意的意见，就可以用到第一个例句。尽管到处都在宣扬保护环境的重要，但是并非世界各地的环境都破坏了啊，比如美丽的非洲大草原原始生态环境保持完好，但是一些边缘小国民不聊生，人民瘦的皮包骨，你说feed population重要还是保护环境重要呢?

2. It is better to take a secure job with a low pay than to take a risky one with a high salary.

根据第二个例句，我们这道题可以不同意。虽然铁饭碗听起来挺诱人的，但新一代的年轻人个个都很傲娇，热衷追寻挑战，高薪高风险的工作相比之下更合他们的口味。

3. To read a book or to watch a movie is a better way to relax than to do some physical exercises.

第三个例句回答的就是这道题，确实约三五好友做做运动听起来不赖，但是对于那些每天做繁重体力劳动的工人来说，额外的运动会加重他们的身体负担，还是一本好书或者一部老电影更能帮他们放松。

句型3 原文材料：

It takes very little imagination to foresee how the kitchen mood wall could lead to advertisements for antidepressants that follow you around the Web...It takes even less imagination to foresee how information about your comings and goings obtained from the Google Latitude Doorbell could be used in a court of law.

推荐句型：

It takes very little imagination to ….It takes even less imagination to ...

推荐理由：

这个句型看起来很简单，但我们一般不会想到先用little表示极少，再用less表示比little还少。两个句子排列工整，可以用在说理部分，用来描述一个不言自明、显而易见的情况

原创例句：

1. It takes very little imagination to foresee how fast competition in the adulthood would turn vicious; it takes even less imagination to foresee in what way vicious competition would influence friendships.

1.几乎没有想象力就能预见成年后的竞争会变得多么恶毒; 只需花费更少的想象力就可以预见恶性竞争将以何种方式影响友谊。

2. It takes little imagination to visualize what people would be like if they do not have access to education. It takes even less imagination to visualize what a country would be like if its people are, through no fault of their own, ignorant.

2.几乎没有想象力就可以想象人们如果没有受教育的机会会是什么样子。如果一个国家没有自己的过失而无知，那么想象一个国家会是什么样子，甚至需要更少的想象力。

3. It takes little imagination to foresee that people’s awareness will soon be enhanced. It takes even less imagination to foresee that governments of different countries will take joint efforts and sponsor more scientific researches against the exacerbating environment.

3.几乎没有想象力就能预见到人们的意识将很快增强。可以预见，各国政府将共同努力，并在日益恶化的环境中资助更多的科学研究，这需要更少的想象力。

学以致用：

1. Competition between friends always has negative influence on their friendship.

这道题简直不能同意更多，成年朋友之间一有竞争就容易友尽。用例句的话说就是，不难想象成年人之间的竞争很快就会升级成撕逼大战，更不难猜竞争变味后的朋友还能不能好好玩耍。

2. Improving schools is the most important factor for the successful development of a country.

古话说得好，教育是国之根本，没文化真可怕。一个人没受过教育会是啥样，一个国家的人都没文化这个国家又会是啥样，敢想吗?所以这道题就同意呗，改善学校是国家成功发展的重要因素。

3. The most important problems that affect our society can be solved within our lifetime.

现在人类烦心的事是什么?看看帝都人民发明的APEC blue就知道了，环境啊。那环境问题能不能在我们有生之年解决呢?当然了，都已经水深火热成这样了，人民的环保意识肯定会提高啊，过年过节放鞭炮的都少了;基层人民都行动了，各国还好意思围观么，当然得行动起来了。当年的敦雾霾一世纪就缓过来了，我们现在科技这么发达，心情这么迫切，很有可能环境问题几十年就解决了。所以这道题答yes就行了。

【托福写作】怎样合理安排托福作文的时间和字数

托福写作部分考查考生在学术领域中的英文写作能力。通常考生需要用课上学到的知识写论文和作文。这要求考生能够将课堂，讲座内容与阅读教材和其他材料相结合，这种类型的写作被称为综合写作。在这种写作题型中，考生必须:

对听到和看到的材料做笔记，在写作前利用笔记组织信?准确地从原文材料中总结、释义和引用信息

写出听到的信息与读到的信息之间是如何联系的

考生还必须会写表达并支持自己观点的论文，这种类型被称为独立写作。在这种写作题型中，考生需要依据自身的知识和经历表达并支持一种观点。

无论是综合写作还是独立写作，都需要遵循一定的写作规则。众所周知，一篇文章有三个基本组成部分：引言、主体和结论。那么如何将这三个部分完美地衔接在一起，写出一篇语句通顺，逻辑清晰的文章呢?遵循下面五个步骤，让你的文章改头换面，更上一层楼!

1、理清文章思路

在开始写作之前，先在草稿纸上写一个简短的概要或提取一些关键点，来帮助自己整理思路。这将有助于文章条理清晰。你也可以直接在电脑的答题区打出提纲或笔记，然后从这些点出发，扩充写更多句子和段落使行文丰满。

2、确定主要论点

论点是引导文章的主要思想或观点，读者可以从文章论点中了解你想要表达的关键信息。无需赘言，你只需用一句话阐明论点，简明扼要地表达论述思路即可。

3、注重写作质量

不知道你在写作文时有没有过这样的经历：写着写着就刹不住笔，文章越来越长而且偏离初衷。实际上，相较于冗长的文章而言，写一篇结构清楚、逻辑通顺的文章来展现自身的语言掌握程度，往往得分会更高。